Sunday, 17 August 2014

Some Writing...

Dragon blood

People think that dragon’s became extinct in 1732 but they are wrong. Dragons are still alive! A man called Dr Drake found an ice dragon in the North pole in an ice cave and was asleep. He thought most people didn’t believe in dragons so he sliced the dragon’s neck open and got a jar full of blood. The jar full of blood can still be seen at the museum of the strange and wonderful. By Blake




The Crollageister


the crollageister croggles up,
the minith white mountain peaks,
in the lamusting and cold  muck,
and the dained old houses,
where as dead as a claccops gutt.


the crollageister scroffolds,
with a gloominating look,
a dongolded man comes riding,
a man with an ongore hook,
while the devil is lying.


the crollageister strauls deeply,
with an accanounding face,
the tips of his frilk point up,
the bolgles in a pace,
the dragon curls up like a nut.


the men of colonial form,
cover the nimbord land,
they attack at the crack of dawn,
the plone of a monster echoes,
throughout the land until morn.


the infarnota spirit of death,
clammons its wings in the night,
glowing bright conlor red,
and its kalcon cocoon lies silent,

the devil lucifer, is dead.




Ping Pang Pong by Wilbur


On the Ping Pang Pong
Were the mice going flying
And all the people go too
There's a Pang Ping Pong
Where the wings go sing
And all the mums jibber jabber joo
There's a Pong Pang Ping
All the bogs go hoot
And you just can’t catch ‘em when they do
So it Pings Pang Pong
The mice go flying
Pang Ping Pong
Wings go sang
Pang pong pings
Bogs go hoot
What a noisy place to belong
Is the Ping Pang Ping Pang Pong



IF I WERE A  NIGHTMARE    
I WOULD SCARE PEOPLE.
I WOULD CRAWL UNDER A PERSONS BED AND SCARE!
I WOULD LET PEOPLE GO TO DEATH UNTIL THEY DIE.
I WOULD LET PEOPLE HAVE THE SCARIEST, MOST DANGEROUS NIGHTMARE IN THE WHOLE UNIVERSE.
I WOULD LET THEM GO TO A FOREST OF HAZARDOUS DEATH (THE FOREST THAT YOU CAN’T EVER NEVER GET OUT.)
I WOULD CREATE A STORM AND LET PEOPLE GO TO A WORLD OF HAZARDS.  
By Takehisa



I know someone who can…



I know someone who can pick his nose.
I know someone who can laugh so hard it could break down walls.
I know someone who can fly by farting.
I know someone who can change shift.
I know someone who can lick his eyes and that someone is YOU!

By Louis V



DAD


He's a:
Fun story teller
Not sick of fib fever
Great Joke teller
Five decibels yeller
Smelly clothes wearer
Generous pocket money bearer
Nightmare vanisher
Heart heart fixer
Giant hugger
Chocolate sharer
Tear squasher
Loud nosher
Smile  maker
Rugby mad
Fashion awful
Not half bad
I am so glad I had my dad
By Meg




One of our writing foci continues to be on adding imagery to our writing and making sure that we show and not tell. We have been talking about how as authors we can deliberately take a sentence that would be boring and add imagery to make it more interesting and engaging for our audience. Here are some of our boring sentences that we have turned into masterpieces.

I am cold/I was cold.

I was outside in the icy, frozen snow. A coat of frost covered my body. I shivered while my teeth chattered and the white sprinkling gusts began.
Ben

The frosty wind bites through my thick woolen jacket as the rain thunders down, soaking me like a rag.
By Emma C

Goose bumps sprouted on my arms as the frosted air blew against me, and sent chills all through my body. I began to shiver.
By Declan

There I was lost. Stuck. The cold nipped at my fingers. “So this is the South Pole”.
It felt like god’s fridge and I was an ice cube sitting in a ice cube tray. I looked down at my hands. “great’ I groan, “Frostbite!”
By Connor

I like pie.

I sank my teeth into the hot, delicious surface. The grease covering my fingers and lips. Pie!
Rowan

I found something.

As I opened the chest it creaked with a loud screech. The shimmering gold, rubies, jewels and diamonds glistened in the sunlight. A golden tin inside holds a necklace with a pirate skull on it.
By Joab

I stared at the box. It’s encrusted with gems and gold. It looked special. I open it with a scrunch. “Ohhh, it’s got everything. Gold, rubies, diamonds, even pearl necklaces. “I think I’m rich!”.
Felix E






3 comments:

  1. Loving the writing! Jude

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  2. Hi I am Keisha I really like the photos and the writhing.

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  3. Kia Ora
    I really like your writing because you used lots of describing.
    My favourite is the I know someone who can...
    From Ella (Room 11 GMS)

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